Got more ideas for what each character says, I've put two different tones for each bit of text, if you could comment on the type of tone you like, or comment on a different piece of dialogue for that part.
"Hey! Come check this out!"......or......"We have an anomaly in the planet's surface Captain". (After stepping on, and seeing the crack)
"Let's dig this bad boy up"....or...."Captain, permission to investigate" (As the crew gathers around crack)
"Let's get some more tools from the craft".....or....."We will need to return to the craft to retrieve specialist equipment" (As the crew gathers around crack)
"Ahhhhhhhhhhh".......or......."Helpppppppppp" (Crew member falls in)
"I'm going down".............or..........."We have to save (name)??? (Male argues)
"No! I'm going back"......or......"The procedure in an incident like this, is to return to the craft, we don't know what could be down there" (Female argues)
"You're just gonna leave him? I'm goin down!".......or......."I Never leave a man behind" (Male argues)
"Ohhhhhh shiiiiii".....or......"Houston we have a problem" (Regaining vision/Flare)
-Montage-
"Where are you!" (Swinging at the invisible blob)
"Take this" (Using flamethrower (oxygen tank with flare))
This is one part that we haven't really discussed at all. I guess on Monday's meeting we can talk about the script properly. Most of these work very well, I particularly like "I Never leave a man behind".
ReplyDeleteWe have our meetings with Colin on Monday, mine is at 10am, I know you're last at 5pm, it's gonna be difficult for us to organise a meetin on Monday :/
ReplyDeleteNot really; each session is only 15 minutes. I'm sure there'll be plenty of gaps when all four of us are free.
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